You are applying to a university in the UK, and below is the beginning of your motivation letter. It has register clashes, which have been underlined. Replace the expression written IN BOLD with a more formal and/or polite one.

HAKEMUS

Ever since I was ten years old, I’ve known my future career will involve working with people. At secondary school, I grew extremely interested in psychology. Things related to the human mind, like emotions and behaviour patterns are highly intriguing. Since I want to specialise in child psychology and especially learning problems, Johnston University would provide me with the best possible education. My aim is to get as thorough an understanding as possible to be able to help children overcome obstacles hindering them from learning.

Johnston University and its famous psychology department play a big role in research and in education. And, the open curriculum has various benefits. Being able to study a lot of languages will help me to interact and create stronger networks. I am also a bit interested in having social sciences as my minor subject.

SAMA TEKSTI > KORVAA ISOLLA KIRJOITETUT SANAT PAREMMIN ASIAYHTEYTEEN SOPIVILLA SYNONYYMEILLÄ (MUODOLLISEMPI / KOHTELIAAMPI):

Ever since I was ten years old, 1.I'VE known my future career will involve working with people. At secondary school, I grew extremely interested in psychology. 2.THINGS related to the human mind, 3.LIKE emotions and behaviour patterns are highly intriguing. Since I 4. WANT to specialise in child psychology and especially learning problems, Johnston University would provide me with the best possible education. My aim is to 5. GET as thorough an understanding as possible to be able to help children overcome obstacles hindering them from learning.

Johnston University and its famous psychology department play a 6.BIG role in research and in education. 7. AND the open curriculum has various benefits. Being able to study 8. A LOT OF languages will help me to interact and create stronger networks. I am also 9. A BIT interested in having social sciences as my minor subject.