Can we please go on for a field trip?

Can we please go on a field trip Eemeli Perttunen ja Jonne Haapaniemi 3.vsk 

 

Dear Susanna. 

Our class would like to inform you that we would love to go for a field trip. Is it okay for you? We could start saving funds for our journey. If all of us are committed for saving, it would be easy to gather enough money. Also it wouldn’t be expensive for us 

We’re not sure what our destination would be, but we might have some ideas. We have thought about going to see famous tourist attractions, going to Lapland for some skiing and go to Skansen in Stockholm. Or maybe you could give us some ideas? 

Why should we go to the trip? Well let me tell you. Our class have behaved well and we have treated you warm-heartedly. Also we nailed our exams! We really stepped up our game.  

How would the trip benefit us and you? It would bring us even closer to eachother. Little travelling would relieve stress and we could be even more focused on our classes. We have noticed that a small break wouldn’t be a bad thing for you. Just kidding... But we all know that you agree with us.  

We hope that you will respond quickly so we can start plan further.  

Best regards 

Your lovely students 

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Konsta Piirainen

Good easy to read text, message was well delivered. I couldn't really find improvement.
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Susanna Kaan

All the parts of a letter are there, well done. You use a lot of (rhetorical) questions in your text. It is a good device to use for effect, but use it sparingly: one or two in a text is maximum.
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Emma Rajanen

Good and well written letter!
However, it would be more appropriate to adress your teacher by their lastname.

Approved by Helmi and Emma.
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